The Present

W.A.L.T:  Write a narrative

Success Criteria

I know I will be successful when….

• The title is suitable for the text.

• The orientation tells who the story is about, and when and where the story happened.
• The complication describes a problem and explains what happened next.
• The resolution explains how the problem was solved.
• Seeks feedback and makes changes to texts to improve clarity and meaning.

In Ako Ngatahi we had to write a narrative about a video. It was about a boy opening a present that was a dog with three legs. Here is the video of the present. I hope you enjoy my story.

The Present

The present

One sunny day I was gaming and my mom went home and she bought a present for me and she put the present on the table and mom said go open your present I was excited when I opened it up, it was a puppy then I saw his one leg then I threw him away  and he came back and I kicked  him away and he saw a red ball bang!!! He bomp on the cabin.  He trying to get the ball out  underneath the cabin and i watched the dog was  having fun playing with the red ball and the ball went on my foot so i grab the ball and went outside and we play threw the ball the end

My Worst Day Ever

W.A.L.T  

My worst day ever

Second draft

My mom was going to walk to get some food and they tried to look carefully for crocodile  and lion so they get a fruit and get back home  quickly and we run quickly so the crocodile won’t get us so my mom run fast when we run I felt I am sick that time so that's when I feel scared

And I’m imagine then I saw my dad at my house and I can see the crocodile sleeping and I can see lion as sleep to so that we be careful to walk back out of are house.and we cook and me was reading and I us my mom if I'm  aloud to go outside and my mom said no and I went to my room and imagine  that  time that was I'm scared and I feel I'm not scared that was the only scared.

Space Chimp

This are my learning goals

These are my learning goals and I'm going to show my parents at my Learning Conference. This slide show shows whether I have achieved my goals or not.

battle of kruger

SMURF it!

Cut and paste these pictures into the table in order of events.  Write a sentence describing what is happening.

	The herd of buffalo are walking along the river bank.
	A pride of of lions are resting in the sun
	The lion see the buffalo crouch to hide.
	The lion start chasing the buffalo.
	The crocodile and the lion tried to eat the baby buffalo
	The buffalo tried     to  get the baby buffalo
	The baby Buffalo is rescued by the herd of buffalo.

My worst day ever

W.A.L.T recall  events through the eyes of an animal.

Success Criteria

I know I will be successful when my recount has a

• Title
• Orientation:  When? Who? Where? Why?
• Sequence of events:  What happened? Describe using the senses (hear, taste, see, smell and feel).
• Personal Comment:  How did the events make you feel?

           First Draft

My Worst Day Ever

It was nice and sunny day and my mom  and daddy buffalo and the me was go for run and went for drink and go back home. The bad lion tries to get the me  and eat them and here come the rest of them. The crocodile came out of the water and the me fall over the water and mom buffalo was fall me  out of water.