I am a student at in Uru Mānuka. In 2020 I was a year 9 and in 2021 I will be a year 10. This is a place where I will be able to share my learning with you. Please note....some work won't be edited - just my first drafts, so there may be some surface errors. I would love your feedback, comments, thoughts and ideas.
Hi Jolly Rose! You have a cool drawing there, I really liked the part where you describe what kind of group they are and how you talk about them in such greatness. Though I know what the picture really is I think you need to actually describe what it is so that people can know what you posted about. Another thing you should look out for is your facts. BTS actually debuted at 2013, also in this part where it says "The three vocalists are Jin,V,Park Jimin and Jeon Jungkook" their aren't three of them. So you just need to check your vocabulary and your facts. Other than that you did a great job, keep up the great work!
Sorry about that, that was a mistake because I was in a hurry But thanks for the feedback I know they debuted on 2013 that was just a mistake also on the three vocalist.
Thanks for posting this Jolly_ Rose. I had never heard of BTS before and I have never heard any of their music. Do they sing in Korean? Do you understand Korean? Have you ever seen BTS live? Thanks for teaching me about BTS.
Hi Mr Scott, Yes they do sing in korean. I don´t understand it but sometimes they sing it in English but just a little because sometimes the other members can´t really speak english just some of them they get teached by their leader RM.I also haven´t seen them in live because they are on break I only see them on Youtube.
Hey Jolly Rose I really like put a lot of the about BTS, I really like when you put a lot of details about BTS but you should check you writing before posting it because there is some mistakes but its okay cause you put your hard work on your work and keep up your good works cause people will appreciate it.
Hello Jolly Rose, Wow what a great blog post you have there, I like the way you included a picture of the band and even linked one of the song of BTS. I also like the way you included the Information of what positions they have in the band. Maybe next time, you could reread your DLO and make sure you don't put the whole name like "Jeon Jungkook - (Jeon Jungkook)". You already told the whole name of that person so, next time make sure you don't get the names repeated when you already mentioned they're full name at the start. Anyways, who is your favourite band members and why?
Hi Elisha Mae thank you for the comment sorry about that I don´t really have time because we only have 4 mins i think. My favourite boy band is actually them. I have a lot of favourite boy band but there the one that I really like,The reason why i like them because there music is actually very catchy,but anyways thank you for the comment
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Hi Jolly Rose! You have a cool drawing there, I really liked the part where you describe what kind of group they are and how you talk about them in such greatness. Though I know what the picture really is I think you need to actually describe what it is so that people can know what you posted about. Another thing you should look out for is your facts. BTS actually debuted at 2013, also in this part where it says "The three vocalists are Jin,V,Park Jimin and Jeon Jungkook" their aren't three of them. So you just need to check your vocabulary and your facts. Other than that you did a great job, keep up the great work!
ReplyDeleteSorry about that, that was a mistake because I was in a hurry But thanks for the feedback I know they debuted on 2013 that was just a mistake also on the three vocalist.
DeleteHey, its okay, but I think you should edit it again and just write in the correct facts. I also have a question, what are some of BTS's achivements?
DeleteThanks for posting this Jolly_ Rose. I had never heard of BTS before and I have never heard any of their music. Do they sing in Korean? Do you understand Korean? Have you ever seen BTS live? Thanks for teaching me about BTS.
ReplyDeleteHi Mr Scott, Yes they do sing in korean. I don´t understand it but sometimes they sing it in English but just a little because sometimes the other members can´t really speak english just some of them they get teached by their leader RM.I also haven´t seen them in live because they are on break I only see them on Youtube.
DeleteHey Jolly Rose I really like put a lot of the about BTS, I really like when you put a lot of details about BTS but you should check you writing before posting it because there is some mistakes but its okay cause you put your hard work on your work and keep up your good works cause people will appreciate it.
ReplyDeleteHi Alliah thank you for the reply I know i have a lot of mistake because I was in a hurry but thanks for the reply.
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ReplyDeleteHello Jolly Rose,
ReplyDeleteWow what a great blog post you have there, I like the way you included a picture of the band and even linked one of the song of BTS. I also like the way you included the Information of what positions they have in the band. Maybe next time, you could reread your DLO and make sure you don't put the whole name like "Jeon Jungkook - (Jeon Jungkook)". You already told the whole name of that person so, next time make sure you don't get the names repeated when you already mentioned they're full name at the start. Anyways, who is your favourite band members and why?
Hi Elisha Mae thank you for the comment sorry about that I don´t really have time because we only have 4 mins i think. My favourite boy band is actually them. I have a lot of favourite boy band but there the one that I really like,The reason why i like them because there music is actually very catchy,but anyways thank you for the comment
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